1. It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In current times, youngsters feel more challenged by study, family and work-related pressure which creates lots of detrimental effects

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. In

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, students face various problems

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academic, social and commercial.

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, from their

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and teachers' sites, they expect youngsters to achieve first class in their class

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children feel more insecure and pressured.

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, every parent wants to receive good grades in school from their children's site.

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, sometimes students have an interest in other extra activities

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as sports, art, music and many more and they want to build their career in these types of fields but

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the high pressure from their family site, they do not achieve their ambition.

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, in their work life, they find lots of work and an unbalanced life

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they do not find a comfort zone.

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, there are some solutions to overcome these types of hurdles in offspring's growth. families should provide guidance and knowledge to their offspring to become successful students and employees.

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, companies should provide a more flexible environment to new employee because after completing their academics they want to have more secure and flexible lives in the workplace. Meanwhile, elder people should teach youngsters how to behave with other citizens. To give an overview, there are several factors

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as commercial, social and academic affect children's

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However

, parents and other people should take care of and provide better opportunities and placement to young human beings.

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The essay does not address the given topic or express a clear opinion. Make sure to clearly state your position on whether cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead.

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Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and coherence.

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0Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

267 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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1. It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

The rise of the social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, students attend private 'cram schools' for extra coaching in test-taking techniques. What is your view of this practice?

too much emphasis is placed on education. more government money should be spent on providing free-time activities.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the best solution of overwaight is to invoaled more sport class while other don't To what extent do you agree?