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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Nowadays it is easier to communicate with others even if we are a long distance apart, the
internet
 is proof of
this
 and has helped us as a society to keep in touch despite the distances.
However
 many
people
 believe
this
 has not only given us facilities but
also
 problems like losing face-to-face
communication
while
 encouraging screen-to-screen
communication
. Even though I think
this
 is true, I will explain why
this
 is not necessarily a bad thing for society. First of all, the
internet
 and
text
 messaging were invented for one reason and
that is
 to encourage contact with others even if they are very far from you.
For example
, you can talk with someone who is on the other side of the world
while
 I'm on another continent, we can even talk by video chat and keep in contact. In
this
 case, even though two
people
 are chatting through a screen they still talking to each other which in cases where neither
internet
 nor
text
 messaging exist will make the two
people
 lose contact
as a result
.
On the other hand
, the fact that
communication
 through
text
 could be very concerning for some
people
 because it encourages us to prefer
this
 type of
communication
 to communicating with others face to face. Proof of
this
 is business meetings, companies now prefer to do it online
instead
 of in an office where everyone can share their own ideas more clearly and talk about them.
This
 could seem good at
first,
but eventually, it can make the employees lose their motivation or feel lonely.
That is
 why in many cases it is better to choose other alternatives of
communication
 that require physical presence. I think communicating via the
Internet
 or
text
 messages gives us a lot of facilities, but if we abuse its use can turn into something really bad
due to
 lack of physical presence.
This
 type of
communication
 should only be used in extreme cases where there is no other option,
while
 face-to-face
communication
 should be always our first option.
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task achievement
Provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction to present your main argument.
task achievement
Expand on your main points and provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more logical and coherent manner.
coherence cohesion
Include a conclusion paragraph to summarize your main points and restate your position.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to improve your lexical resource.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammatical accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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