The graph shows the amount of income from cinema ticket and DVD sales in the USA and internationally from 2001 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of income from cinema ticket and DVD sales in the USA and internationally from 2001 to 2010.
The line graph illustrates how much payment in
cinema
ticket and
DVD
sales
in both
USA
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and
global
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between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that North America
DVD
sales
had the highest income than others at the
begin
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of the period, but
at the
end
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international
cinema
sales
had the biggest salaries whilst other trends
nothing
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special. Both worldwide
DVD
and
cinema
vending increased during the period surveyed except between 2004 and 2005.
At
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the
begin
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, international
DVD
sales
under
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were under
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20
billions
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but
at the end
it
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they
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rose to over 30
billions
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billion
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, respectively. International
cinema
had the same trend with the exception of between 2008 and 2010. Turning to the remaining statistic, in
further
details
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North American
DVD
and
cinema
sales
corresponding
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during the
surveyed
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apart
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apply
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from 2008 to 2009. North American
DVD
sales
had the biggest amount of income when started and decreased to the nearly lowest figure
at the end
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, dvd, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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