The graph shows the amount of income from cinema ticket and DVD sales in the USA and internationally from 2001 to 2010.
The line graph illustrates how much payment in
cinema
ticket and DVD
sales
in both USA
and Correct article usage
the USA
global
between 2001 and 2010.
Change the word
globally
Overall
, it can be seen that North America DVD
sales
had the highest income than others at the begin
of the period, but Replace the word
beginning
at the
end
international Add a comma
end,
cinema
sales
had the biggest salaries whilst other trends nothing
special.
Both worldwide Add a missing verb
were nothing
DVD
and cinema
vending increased during the period surveyed except between 2004 and 2005. At
the Change preposition
In
begin
, international Replace the word
beginning
DVD
sales
under
20 Add a missing verb
were under
billions
but Change to singular
billion
at the end
it
rose to over 30 Correct pronoun usage
they
billions
, respectively. International Change to singular
billion
cinema
had the same trend with the exception of between 2008 and 2010.
Turning to the remaining statistic, in further
details
North American Fix the agreement mistake
detail
DVD
and cinema
sales
corresponding
during the Wrong verb form
corresponded
surveyed
Replace the word
survey
apart
from 2008 to 2009. North American Rephrase
apply
DVD
sales
had the biggest amount of income when started and decreased to the nearly lowest figure at the end
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, dvd, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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