The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

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As per the diagram, it depicts the process of producing chocolate syrup.

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,the procedure has ten steps to produce a final choco syrup .

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this

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kind of cocoa tree can be seen in countries like America,Indonesia and Africa.After plugging out the ripe red pods ,they will be harvested and white cocoa

beans

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will be produced.

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following that, the white

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get fermented in the tray and

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they will be spread in a tray and

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put under the sun for drying.

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,the dry seeds are packed inside large sacks for transportation.After that ,the sacks get docked in the truck and destined for the factory.

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,the seeds reached the factory and prepared for the next step.

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,the

beans

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are roasted,particularly at 350 degrees Celsius.

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, the roasted

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will be ground and the outer shells will be removed.

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, shell-removed

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were pressed under a roller and

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liquid chocolate was collected from it.

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

Topic -"Prevention is better than a cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

Some people say that your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some people say it is important to keep your home and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this ?