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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart presents the approximate shift in prices of 3 different metals: copper, nickel, and
zinc
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 in 12 months of 2014.
Overall
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, nickel’s
price
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 changes enormously,
while
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 that of
zinc
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 rises higher.
Although
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 the
price
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 of copper experiences some drops, it goes back to the same level. For
nickel
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a nickel
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, the
price
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 started at 6
percent
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per cent
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 in
January
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 2014, but it dropped to
the
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its
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 lowest at -3 per
cent
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 in
June
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 which was the lowest point of nickel’s
price
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 in 2014.
However
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, it started to rise and remained unchanged at -1 per
cent
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 from
June
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 to September.
Also
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, it fluctuated slightly before rising to 1 per
cent
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 in November.
Then
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, it remained stable at 1 per
cent
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 until December. The
price
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 of copper started at 2 per
cent
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 in
January
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, and it decreased until the lowest point at -0.5 per
cent
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 in May and
June
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.
Then
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, it started rising up until it reached 1 per
cent
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 in July and remained unchanged until September. After that, it dropped a little and went up until it reached 1.5 per
cent
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 at the same level at the beginning
in
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of
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January
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. The
price
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 of
zinc
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 started in the lowest rank at 1 per
cent
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 in
January
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. In February, it rose
to3
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to
per
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3
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cent
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per cent
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,
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 and dropped to the lowest point at -1 per
cent
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 in
June
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 and October. In November, the
price
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 of
zinc
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 increased to 1.5 per
cent
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, and it ended up in the highest rank in the
last
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 month at 2 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zinc, price, january, cent, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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