Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

In the world, there are numerous countries which are suffering from
overpopulation
problem
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.
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show
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that overcrowding
problem
of urban areas can cause numerous
of
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diseases,
pollutions
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and other problems. There is no denying that
this
problem
can make our
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hard as well. In order to fix
this
circumstance there are numerous approaches
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humanity
.
On the contrary
as a
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humanity
could not solve it yet. It seems to me that one of the issues which
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caused
by
overpopulation
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diffuculties
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difficulties
in
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public
transport
. There is no doubt
about
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that it is the most essential issue for
people
.
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However
in big cities
where
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have
overpopulation
even almost all of them
poorly
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are poorly
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constructed in terms of
the
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public
transport
. I strongly believe that it is much more crucial than we realize. In my
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problems in public
transport
can cause a lot of victims
as a consequence
of crashes. As far as I know to solve
this
problem
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optimal
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way
humanity
should research
about
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other countries where
already
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they encountered
this
problem
. In the
end
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I will give an example from one country
where
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did it practically. First of all,
governments
have to build new cities near another
city
where have
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problem
. Actually, my speculation is the best way to solve
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decrasing
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decreasing
population
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size in
main
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city
. In
fact
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fact,
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usually
governments
use some strategies to
decrase
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decrease
population.
However
,
this
process can take a long time and it is not actually
main
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solving
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to
this
problem
.
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I think other countries have to use
this
method
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future
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the future
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because they
maybe can
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encounter
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circumnstance
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circumstance
circumstances
in overcoming years
consequently
. Regardless of what
people
think, I guess as
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human
being
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beings
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we
also
can do something individually. But it does not mean
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responsibilty
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responsibility
belongs
us
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to us
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. As a matter of
fact
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the main responsibility belongs to
governments
.
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otherwise
if they don't do their
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responsibilities
that
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time
people
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attemps
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attempts
attempt
can
does
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not make
a
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sense. As a
perosn
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person
,
humanity
can use other vehicles to go anywhere to solve
public
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transport
problem
.
This
is just one way that I support
to
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do
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.
For
example
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in
Amsterdam
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Amsterdam,
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people
go to their work by bike.
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Additionally
governments
can take an example from Malaysia
where
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have
population
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problem
and they fix it by building
new
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city
near
capital
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the capital
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city
of Malaysia called Kuala Lampur.
As a result
in the
city
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where
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there
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is not
such
a
problem
. If I
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summarise
in my
oppinon
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opinion
there are so many ways to solve
this
situtation
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situation
but
governments
and
people
should handle their
responsibilites
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responsibilities
to overcome
this
issue.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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