Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion about this?

Nowadays,
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and work-life balance of workers become one of
the
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significant issues in the workplace.
That is
the reason why someone says a company should allocate some working
hours
for
employee
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employees
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to go
work-out
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work out
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during the
day
. Personally, I disagree with that statement and I going to explain what my reasons are.
First,
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working out
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during
the
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working
hours
can make the employee lose their working efficiency during the
day
. Because of
working-out
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working out
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, it
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usaually
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usually
to be sweated and feel
exhuasted
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exhausted
, and
undoubtably
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undoubtedly
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, that
caused
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causes
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you to be uncomfortable, smell bad and feel too tired faster than
ususal
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usual
.
Hence
, it can disturb not only yourself but
also
your colleagues and your work responsibilities.
Furthermore
, there is not
everyone
has a passion
of
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for
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working-out
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working out
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. If someone, who would like to
work-out
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work out
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in
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during
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working
hours
, pauses their work during the
day
to go work-out, it will affect
a
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the
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flow of work to other people who have not
get
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gotten
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into exercise.
Moreover
, it will not be fair to
everyone
, if someone can do
less
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fewer
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working
hours
becuase
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because
they go to
work-out
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work out
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during the
day
, and for sure, you cannot force
everyone
to have a passion
of
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for
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working-out
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working out
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too. In summary, I still believe that I disagree
to give
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with giving
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some working
hours
to employees to
go
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work
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working-out
during the
day
. Because it is not the thing
that is
neccessary
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necessary
to
everyone
. More than that, it can make them lack
of
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apply
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working efficiency and
unfair
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be unfair
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to other employees who do not get into it. By the way, I still believe that
well-being
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the well-being
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and work-life balance of employees
are
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is
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still
a
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an
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important
issue
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issues
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of the business, So, I would like to recommend that
working-out
privillege
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privilege
should be a fundamental welfare in the workplace,
For example
, the special fare at
partnership
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the partnership
a partnership
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fitness
center
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centre
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or having a
working-out
area in the workplace for free.
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