The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966,1986 and 2006
The bar chart shows
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us data about the age of females in Australia when they gave birth to their first child every two decades from 1986 to 2006.
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Overall
women
who under
24 decreased Add a missing verb
were under
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year to year, meanwhile between 30 and 39 Change preposition
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where
increased.
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marry
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marrying
above
30 were very unpopular. Because below 15 Add a missing verb
were above
percent
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per cent
women
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gave
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to a
a
first child were at least 30. Change the word
their
However
, women
who under
30 were the vast majority. In the subsequent years Add a missing verb
were under
women
who under
24 dramatically went down, Add a missing verb
were under
when
females who Correct word choice
while
above
30 gradually climbed up. Add a missing verb
were above
Furthermore
, between 25 and 30 unpredictablely
rose to a half. In the next Correct your spelling
unpredictably
unpredictable
decades
results were Add a comma
decades,
same
. But those who were exactly Correct article usage
the same
a
half decreased to Correct article usage
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a
38 Correct article usage
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percent
.
Married civils who were young and Change the spelling
per cent
more
in the past Correct word choice
older
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exchanged
with
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