The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966,1986 and 2006

The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966,1986 and 2006
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us data about the age of females in Australia when they gave birth to their first child every two decades from 1986 to 2006.
Overall
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24 decreased
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year to year, meanwhile between 30 and 39
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increased. In 1966
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and giving birth when you
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30 were very unpopular. Because below 15
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first child were at least 30.
However
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30 were the vast majority. In the subsequent years
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24 dramatically went down,
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females who
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30 gradually climbed up.
Furthermore
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rose to a half. In the next
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results were
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. But those who were exactly
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half decreased to
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38
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. Married civils who were young and
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older
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in the past
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places with elder
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nearby
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future
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • first-time mothers
  • age bracket
  • fertility rate
  • childbearing age
  • socioeconomic factors
  • educational attainment
  • healthcare advancements
  • family planning
  • societal norms
  • trend analysis
  • delaying motherhood
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