The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. 

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph provides information about the percentages of three distinct groups of
people
visiting five different places in Canada. The unit is measured in percentage.
Overall
, the populace's interest in visiting
such
places witnessed a different trend throughout the period. Canadian citizens showed much interest in visiting the
cinema
as compared to other groups.
Although
, the Canadian populace enjoyed going to places at the onset,
however
, foreigners from
England
surpassed them
at the end
. With regard to
Cinema
, Canadian
people
showed much interest. More than half of the
people
visited the place. The percentage was higher than its counterparts.
However
, their like in other sectors decreased significantly in theatre with just one-fifth and increased gradually to about 40%. Outsiders in other countries
as well as
foreigners in
England
did not show much love for
cinema
. In fact, half and about 68% went to watch
cinema
. Their figure decreased substantially in theater with just one-fifth for outsiders and above 20% for
England
citizens. The vast majority of foreigners in other countries liked going to the library more than their counterparts. More than half liked
such
areas with about 40% for
England
people
. Regarding to zoo, 40% of tourists in
England
nation and about 45% in other countries liked going to the place. Their percentages were higher than in
theatre
Add an article
the theatre
a theatre
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cinema, england with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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