Some people think that it's always better to live in the rented accomodation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it.

Human civilization nowadays
think
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thinks
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it is more convenient to live in
the
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a
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rental
houses
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house
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instead
of
buy
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buying
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a new one. Houses in the city tend to be more expensive
due to
the high demand and developed infrastructure.
However
, I believe both of
views
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the views
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above have advantages and disadvantages which will be explained below.
To begin
, the number
poverty
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of poverty
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in
develop
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developing
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country
is continue
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continues
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to
arise
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rise
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. Many society especially students who
living wander
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live
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in another city prefer to settle their life in
the
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a
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flat or rented
houses
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house
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instead
of
buy
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buying
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a new one. There are several benefits
living
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to living
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in
the
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apply
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rented accommodation.
First,
leased
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leasing
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a
house
or flat
tend
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tends
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to be cheaper.
Second,
people do not need to pay for extra maintenance.
For instance
,
due to
the high
criminals
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number of criminals
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in West Papua,
nomad
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nomads
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especially
woman
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women
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prefer to live in
flat
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flats
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because it is safer and
comfortable
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more comfortable
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.
On the contrary
,
people
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for people
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who
are understand
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understand
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about
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apply
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finance, rented accommodation is not
suitable
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a suitable
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choice for long-term investment. They believe it is more wasteful
rather
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apply
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than
buy
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buying
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house
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a house
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or apartment.
For example
,
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the eldery
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eldery
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elderly
in Indonesia always advise
youngster
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youngsters
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to buy a
house
as soon as possible.
House
is one of the good
investation
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investigation
and the price tend to increase each year.
To conclude
, there are advantages and disadvantages of
rented
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renting
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a place to stay. It depends on how people can gain benefits from every decision they
made
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make
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.
Rent
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Renting
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house
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a house
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can be a choice for
a
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the
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short-term
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short term
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,
while
buy
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buying
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house
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a house
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or apartment is
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a life-time
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life-time
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lifetime
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investment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • mortgage
  • down payment
  • maintenance
  • equity
  • investment
  • restrictions
  • lease
  • appreciate
  • commitment
  • upfront costs
  • residential stability
  • property market
  • rental agreement
  • tenancy
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