It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
In some
life
situations, it Use synonyms
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is necessary
the
individuals to take some Correct article usage
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risks
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for
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in
for example
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money
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This
essay will discuss Linking Words
about
how essential to take some Remove the preposition
apply
risks
in Use synonyms
life
for both Use synonyms
of
working and private Change preposition
apply
life
and describe that stepping out of your comfort zone by taking some Use synonyms
risks
has benefits over drawbacks.
In Use synonyms
workplace
, Add an article
the workplace
the
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apply
people
who Use synonyms
works
in Change the verb form
work
company
for a long time usually earn Add an article
the company
lower
income than Add an article
a lower
people
who change their Use synonyms
job
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in
every 2-3 years. Change preposition
apply
Although
the Linking Words
people
who frequently switch their Use synonyms
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job
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jobs
having
the risk Wrong verb form
have
about
their new Change preposition
that
job
may Use synonyms
worse
than their current Add a missing verb
be worse
job
, they normally get Use synonyms
higher
salary around 30% from their new Correct article usage
a higher
job
. Use synonyms
Additionally
, unless Linking Words
people
dare to switch their Use synonyms
Use synonyms
job
, they will not have Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
opportunity
to do new things that they want to try. Even though, in employment Correct article usage
the opportunity
life
, switching Use synonyms
the
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apply
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job
has the risk Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
to face
with bad boss and Change preposition
of facing
fail for
probation, I believe that the advantages of taking Wrong verb form
failing
risks
in working Use synonyms
life
will Use synonyms
far
more significant than Add a missing verb
be far
disadvantages
.
In Correct article usage
the disadvantages
term
of personal Fix the agreement mistake
terms
life
, financial well-being which is one of the most important things of our Use synonyms
life
is related to investment and financial management. Generally, we need to take some Use synonyms
risks
by investing in riskier assets in order to generate higher Use synonyms
return
or more profit Fix the agreement mistake
returns
to
our investment portfolio, Change preposition
for
refer
to investment theory which is “High risk, high return”. Wrong verb form
referring
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, the chance to get Linking Words
loss
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lost
also
higher Linking Words
follow
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following
risks
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, sometimes we need to allow other Linking Words
people
, Use synonyms
for
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example
financial experts, to manage our Add the comma(s)
example,
money
because we Use synonyms
not
have enough time to manage by ourselves. Change the verb form
do not
did not
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we have Linking Words
possibility
to Add an article
the possibility
a possibility
loss
our Replace the word
lose
money
because of giving our authority to manage our Use synonyms
money
to other Use synonyms
people
, most of the financial experts Use synonyms
are
manage your Unnecessary verb
apply
money
wisely.
In conclusion, taking some Use synonyms
risks
will lead to Use synonyms
have
higher income, more Unnecessary verb
apply
opportunity
and higher Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
return
. Though taking some Fix the agreement mistake
returns
risks
by changing jobs Use synonyms
have
Wrong verb form
having
chance
to face Correct article usage
a chance
with
unexpected Change preposition
apply
situation
and investing in riskier assets can be Fix the agreement mistake
situations
loss
, I believe that the benefits Add an article
a loss
are outweighed
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outweigh
drawbacks
.Correct article usage
the drawbacks
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