It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some
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situations, it
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for
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individuals to take some
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their decisions,
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, changing jobs and investing
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how essential to take some
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in
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for both
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working and private
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and describe that stepping out of your comfort zone by taking some
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has benefits over drawbacks.  In 
workplace
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,
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people
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who
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in
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the company
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for a long time usually earn
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a lower
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income than
people
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who change their
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every 2-3 years.
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the
people
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who frequently switch their
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job
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having
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the risk
about
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that
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their new
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may
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than their current
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, they normally get
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salary around 30% from their new
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, unless
people
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dare to switch their
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job
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, they will not have
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to do new things that they want to try. Even though, in employment
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, switching
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job
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has the risk
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of facing
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with bad boss and
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probation, I believe that the advantages of taking
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in working
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will
far
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more significant than
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the disadvantages
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. In
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terms
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of personal
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, financial well-being which is one of the most important things of our
life
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is related to investment and financial management. Generally, we need to take some
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by investing in riskier assets in order to generate higher
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or more profit
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our investment portfolio,
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to investment theory which is “High risk, high return”.
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, the chance to get
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is
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higher
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the
risks
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, sometimes we need to allow other
people
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financial experts, to manage our
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because we
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have enough time to manage by ourselves.
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we have
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the possibility
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to
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our
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because of giving our authority to manage our
money
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to other
people
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, most of the financial experts
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manage your
money
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wisely. In conclusion, taking some
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will lead to
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higher income, more
opportunity
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opportunities
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and higher
return
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returns
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. Though taking some
risks
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by changing jobs
have
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having
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chance
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a chance
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to face
with
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unexpected
situation
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situations
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and investing in riskier assets can be
loss
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a loss
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, I believe that the benefits
are outweighed
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drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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