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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The bar
chart
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 and pie
chart
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 illustrate the results of a survey of adult education. In the bar
chart
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, the reasons why
adults
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 decide to
study
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 can be observed, and
in
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apply
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the pie
chart
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,
it
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apply
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represents how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. As the information
shown
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shows
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, forty
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
adults
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 decided to
study
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 because they were interested in the subject which has the most percentage.
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, the aim of most
adults
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were
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was
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also
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 to gain qualifications
with
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apply
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two
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percent
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per cent
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 less than being interested in the subject.
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, the reason that only nine
percent
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 of the
adults
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 decided to
study
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 was to meet people which has the
least
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lowest
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 percentage among the reasons why
adults
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 decided to
study
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. There are three ways people
thinl
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think
 the costs of adult education should be shared: taxpayer, individual,
employer
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and employer
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. The most expected way is individual with forty
percent
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,
whereas
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 taxpayer is a
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quarter
quater
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quarter
 of the pie
chart
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 which is the way that has the
least
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lowest
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 percentage
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, adults, study, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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