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In most of the countries, people prefer to live in a rented apartment rather than buying a home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in rented accommodation? #countries #people #apartment #home #accommodation

#countries #people #apartment #home #accommodation
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majority
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 of the countries, people
now-a-days
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 like to
accomodate
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accommodate
 in a rented house rather than
owning
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 one.
This
 is done in order to save
money
.
On the contrary
 ,not having a own house becomes an insecurity.
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portarys
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portrays
 both views comprehensively. To
iniate
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initiate
, individuals who work in
private
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the private
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 sector like Mutlinational
comapnies
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companies
 are prone to change their jobs rapidly, say one gets promoted to
higher
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a higher
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 position and
keep
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keeps
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 on moving to
the
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various cities.
Thus
, having own
accomodation
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accommodation
 would make it difficult to achieve
this
 as lots of
money
 is gone into buying the
home
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Furthermore
, adventurous individuals want to utilize their
money
in doing
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 the activities they like. So, they preserve the
money
 by not having a
home
 .A case in
the
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Gurgaon presented
a
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data that seventy
percent
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per cent
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 of
population
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the population
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 do want
home
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a home
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 in order to fulfil their quest of roaming around the world . Recently, an older couple
of
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from
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 Australia has been found wandering around the world with the amount with which they could have bought
home
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a home
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.
However
, a
home
 ensures
the
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security in life. After getting retired from whichever job an individual is involved
, needs
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 to take a permanent shelter.Now, without a place what would his future be like
.
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Such
 persons become
burden
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a burden
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 for the government because shelter houses need to be built for
such
 citizens. millions of rupees were spent by
French
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the French
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 government
for
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such
 persons in order to make their older days better. The same
money
 could been used to build either a hospital or a school. To infer, having a
home
 or not having it is entirely a personal desire. But I would think future security is a must.
Thus
, youth should carefully and timely analyze the role of a permanent shelter.
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