some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is often said that a pleasant way to persuade

people

of various

cultures

and different age groups to gather is

music

. Regarding

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this

, I strongly agree with

this

view;

however

, sometimes it depends on

personal

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or national tastes of different

people

. In terms of various

music

styles

which

are existed

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around the world, there are many

styles

that are extremely popular among the

people

.

For instance

, the BTS band is the most beloved and famous group; which is familiar to everybody, particularly among

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teenagers and youngsters; whether they are their fans or not. So that, when the BTS

are holding

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a concert

at

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every country, all

kind

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of

people

including

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all sorts of ages or

cultures

will be gathered together

at

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that area.

Moreover

, there are many singers or

music

constructors, who are as famous as the mentioned group

that

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are able to

bringing

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all

kind

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of

people

together without any

notices

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to

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their ages, nationalities or races.

Nevertheless

, there would be many

styles

of

music

that are totally exclusive and limited to only one group of

people

.

Such

as traditional

music

that might not be attractive

for

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all

sort

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of

people

.

Furthermore

, many

styles

would belong to one particular country or

cultures

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which could not be

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for

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other

cultures

, which means they are based on individual tastes. Taking everything into consideration, many types of

music

are available to attract all

kind

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of

people

from different

cultures

and age groups; in spite of the fact that other

styles

would be fascinating for limited manners. With respect to

this

attitude, I hope that many more international

music

styles

will

be emerged

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in future that can absorb more

people

in order to bring them together.