Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
sports
taking a part in our
life
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lives
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. There are some people
suppose
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who suppose
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that joining
to
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apply
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the
sport
hasing
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having
a
team
like football or basketball will be more
effictive
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effective
,
while
others believe that playing alone like swimming is great. In
this
essay, I will discuss both arguments and
supported
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with
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them with
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examples.
Sports
which
is
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depends on a
team
,
hasing
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has
a lot of
beneficial
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benefits
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. Take football as an example, they are a
team
from
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of
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11 players, playing
againest
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against
another
team
with the same number of players.
This
sport
learn
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teaches
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us how to work as a
team
to protect our goals, and how to support each other to reach the other side to score a goal.
Moreover
, it
learn
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teaches
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us how to work as a
team
to
achive
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achieve
our goals. All of these things
reflected
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reflect
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on our daily life and develop our skills.
On the other hand
,
sports
like swimming or tennis,
it
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apply
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depends on one person pushing him or
her self
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herself
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to the maximum to reach his or her own goal.
Furthermore
, it
develop
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develops
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individsual
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individual
skills in person.
For instance
, time management, by
orgnizing
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organising
the time between
sport
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sports
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, work, friends and etc.
In addition
, people
whose
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who
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prefer
individsual
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individual
sports
, are more independent in their life.
To sum up
, playing
sports
in a
team
or
individsual
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individually
, both of them
has
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have
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benefits.
Also
, choosing
kind
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the kind
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of
sports
it
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apply
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depends on the person and his or her
prefers
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preferences
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.
Finally
, I think playing
sport
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sports
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in general is the best choice for
better
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a better
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lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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