Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, a lot of problems in our world. The environmental
problem
is the main thing
is
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this
.
However
, Some
people
think that the main environmental
problem
of our time is the loss of a particular species of
plants
and
animals
. By the
way
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we have more prominent environmental issues these days. Both
view points
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viewpoints
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will be discussed in
this
essay.
Firstly
, I understand why some
people
believe that a class of extinction is the most important environmental
problem
. Whatever, the main
point
for
this
is that social media or newspapers these days give
people
much information in the endangered category of biological classification.
In addition
, many
people
know that losing any kind of
plants
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plant
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or
animals
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can break the food chain, which forms life on
earth
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.
By gathering
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information for many Sources which only
concern
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about
plants
and
animals
can lead
people
to the thought that species
lose
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is the biggest
problem
in the environment. On the one hand, I think we have a lot of environmental problems. There are many environmental cases that are more important than class disasters for several reasons.
Therefore
, the first
point
is
that
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the
declination
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of natural resources.
This
can be seen globally in a lot of countries that often have wars because of oil reeds The second
point
is that many
people
are all around the world. Today we are deprived of freshwater.
This
point
is the most common in the world. As
such
the more developing the industry is, the more polluted the water is.
To sum up
,
while
I agree that the markdown of many categories of
plants
and
animals
is an important
problem
, I am of the opinion that there are more important environmental problems that
people
need to
concern
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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