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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a nagative development?

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The amount of screen
time
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children
 is concerning many adults, since most of the hours of the day are spent on
smartphones
.
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this
 might be the case and present arguments, why, in my opinion,
this
 is a negative development. The core of the problem
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 parenting. I have seen numerous amount of times, when a child is given a gadget from an earlier age to calm down or as an option to spend
time
.
This
 way a child learns that
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 he gets upset, he is given a smartphone to play.
Furthermore
, an addiction can be easily
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 and in the
future
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 it will be hard for a person to stay away from his electronic device. Another reason might be social media, where most of the
children
's and
teenager's
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 communication happens. The temptation
as well as
 the fear of missing something out is high, which leads to endless scrolling that increases the screen
time
 a lot. When
children
 play, they develop crucial social skills and creativity that are important for their
future
.
However
, the increased usage of
smartphones
effects
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on
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the quality of communication, since most of the messages sent are short and meaningless.
Besides
 that,
children
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time
 will lack concentration, since their attention span will get shorter.
This
 might in the
future
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 negatively their academic success.
Therefore
, I believe,
children
's increased
time
 spent on
smartphones
, is
definetely
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definitely
 a negative development that
effects
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 their life in
a
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 long run.
To conclude
,
children
's usage of
smartphones
 depends on the way they have been raised
up
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at home. Most are offered gadgets to deal with hard feelings from an earlier age, resulting in concentration problems in the
future
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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