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Some people think that we learn beast through in person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and gie your own opinion.

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education
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 the newborn must learn a lot of things from their surrounding and from society. They make friends and they all are monitored by tutors in a physical presence, and whenever there is any dought in their modules they can ask to tutor freely in their classroom without any delay.
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online does not have so many pros
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online because
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there is no one going to ask a question to them, they can learn without any
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 in their home whenever they want to learn. The parents
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Thus
 , conclude there are two methods of
education
 online and offline both have some pros and cons and I prefer the old one is best for the newborn.
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