Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to right and wrong. Parents should not only be the ones responsible. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that
schools
and
parents
should act together to teach good
behaviour
to
children
and take
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responsibility
from
parents'
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the parents'
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. I
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totally
agree with that view because
schools
and
parents
have different meanings for
child
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children
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and these differences can be used together to educate
children
for
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to
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become
a
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good
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people
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. Teachers know different discipline techniques and use mild punishments to maintain structure in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
For example
, they can give more homework or
presantations
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presentations
presentation
to the student who shows bad
behaviour
in
classroom
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the classroom
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. In that way,
children
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twice before their bad actions.
Also
,
schools
represent authority to students and
this
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a little fear environment.
This
environment with pressure help teacher to introduce good habitats and
behaviour
to students.
Furthermore
, teachers always protect emotional distance and put
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barrier
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barriers
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between students to maintain that
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authority
figure.
This
brings to sustainability of discipline that
direct
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them in the right direction.
On the other hand
, families know their
children
better than anyone else so they can teach anything to them more easily.
Furthermore
, they can monitor
children
's
behaviour
continuesly
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continuously
continues
after showing
right
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the right
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habit and promote that habit frequently.
This
helps to transform good habitat
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the
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part of the
children
's character.
Also
, they know the weak side of their
children
to manipulate them.
For example
, if
children
like to
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to eat
hamburger
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in
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outside, they can use that activity as a trophy after good
behaviour
. From different
side
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sides
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,
also
they can use
children
's fair
for building
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their character. In conclusion,
parents
and
schools
boths
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both
are important for building good character in
children
. They have different tools to educate them
in
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the right path and those
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techniques
can not think
seperately
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separately
from each other to show them what is
benefical
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beneficial
and harmful.
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