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It is better to be unemployed than to be employed in a job one does not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some of us believe that working with undesirable conditions is considered worse
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than being jobless. Despite there being lots of negative
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 with
unemployed
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 conditions, it is just
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 matter of
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status. There are still lots of remote jobs and freelance options to consider.
Thus
, I strongly agree with the opinion that unenjoyed
employees
 lead to a wider drawback for
employees
’
wellbeing
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, which is impacted by unidentified problems in the company. Most companies measured the happiness of their
employees
 through job satisfaction, which
then
 impacted
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employee performance that reflected on their productivity. Workers tend to work as much as they can to achieve the given targets because they
also
 need the monetary benefits, disregarding whether they are enjoyed or not. In
this
 situation, most of the workforce neglected their wellness
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 may occur
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 long-term impact
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 those working
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.
Due to
 the high workload,
employees
 somehow do not pay attention to their worsening mental and physical health. The overworked
employees
 have much pressure
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 their regular tasks, which leads to depression. If
this
 occurs in the long run, it would ruin the employee’s physician health, which contributes to
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 financial
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expenses
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expense
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 that may occur at their retirement.
Overall
,
employees
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 enjoy their work are very important for individual
wellbeing
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. To a wider extent,
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comfortable working conditions and wellness benefits are important factors to consider
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 the employer.
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