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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

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In recent years, it has become more and more spoken, that the younger generation of today tends to spend the bulk of their spare
time
 scrolling
the
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social network sites and playing computer games
and
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therefore
 neglecting opportunities for their physical development.
However
,
this
 statement is rather debatable and I do not entirely agree with it. Over the course of
time
,
internet
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, computer technology, media sources and other “screen activities” have significantly developed, allowing for a much better experience received by the users and enabling the drastic surge of the
time
 children spend using their gadgets.
This
 in turn leads to less
time
 spent outside with their friends which means that adolescents’ bodies are not as firm and enduring as they once were. Indeed, the study, conducted by CHILDRENPLAY medical organization suggests that modern minors are 21% more likely to receive common injuries and 15% more likely to be affected by seasonal diseases.
On the other hand
, with ever increasing availability of workout classes, gymnastics and other courses online
together with
 a growing amount of sports amenities
outsides
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, the opposing effect
also
 takes place.
Thus
, the number of teens visiting gyms has increased by a stunning 107% because of their concerns for
the
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 future health and desires to get a better, more attractive and robust body, as
it
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is evident from the research of gymbro.com data website. Because of
this
, I do not deem it entirely appropriate to consider all youngsters to be less active than those before them.
While
 the problem of too much
time
 being spent online should be a matter of concern, I believe that modern teens still have a lot of will to spend their
time
 actively strengthening themselves and, if given all the clear information on the problem, will jump at the opportunity of developing themselves.
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