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Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The picture below shows the floor plans of a public library both 20 years ago and how it looks currently.
Overall
, the library is rectangular in shape with
four
 distinct areas in the
four
 corners of the building and two
passage ways
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, one in the north-south direction beginning at the
entrance
 and the other in the east-west direction opening into all the
four
 rooms of the library. The main changes currently are
,
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 the increased area of the children's
room
 and the conversion of the enquiry desk,
in addition
 to other services. In terms of
current
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the current
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 floor plan, the children's
room
 has moved from the northwest corner to the
the
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north east
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northeast
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 corner with an increased area, housing sofas,
the
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books
, and a storytelling corner.
Additionally
,
while
 there is a lecture
room
 at the far
right
 of the
entrance
, the cafe and the computer
room
 are immediately on the
right
 and left of the
entrance
 respectively. The corridor to the left houses the reference
books
whereas
 on the
right
 are the adult-fiction
books
along with
 the information desk and three self-service machines.
However
, twenty years ago, the
four
 equal-sized rooms in the corners housed the enquiry desk, children's
books
, digital products
room
 and reading
room
 for periodicals moving from the
right
 to the left of the
entrance
. The seating was arranged in the north-south corridor,
whereas
 the east-west corridor housed the fiction and non-fiction
books
 for adults were arranged
in
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 the left and the
right
 of
east-west
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the east-west
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 passage.
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