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the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.
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The bar chart depicts data about the percentage of purchased fresh
coffee
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 and soluble
coffee
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 and the proportion of people who visited a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, Adelaide and Hobart in a four-week period.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that in four cities,
instead
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 of Adelaide, the
ineterest
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interest
interests
 of those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea
were
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 the most popular,
whereas
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 the proportion of fresh
coffee
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 was least common during the whole period in question. Observing the details, in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart attendance
a
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at a
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coffee
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 shop had the biggest proportion at just over 60%, but it was not as successful as in Adelaide,
just
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at just
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 under 40%. As for instant
coffee
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,

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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