some people say that school should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to right and wrong.Parent should not only be the ones responsible .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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their future lives.In modern society ,there is a debate
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the school mentors should
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and family backgrounds are the vital considerations than schooling periods. First of all, I strongly trust that
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family backgrounds and the rising environments are the most significant
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citizens
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researches have revealed the effectiveness of
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enormous involvement than any concerns to control and
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teenagers positively.
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one of huge obstacles to give extra
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of scholars have
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period to inculcate good habits than
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staff of the schools.
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works, assignments, lessons and
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target examinations ,and educational auditors examine the
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teachers
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professional
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resposibilities
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responsibilities
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job security. In conclusion, I would
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prefer
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opinion by
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those facts
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influences
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difficulties of the teachers with job
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responsibilities
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allocation
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positive
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a complete person.
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