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This line chart diagram depicts that the number of teenagers in UK follow habit of eating vegetables.

This line chart diagram depicts that the number of teenagers in UK follow habit of eating vegetables.
#line #teenagers #uk #habit #vegetables
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This
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 line chart shows the
numbers
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number
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 of adolescents in
UK
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the UK
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follow
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who follow
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custom
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the custom
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 of eating vegetables.It is clear from the graph that the
percentage
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 ranges between high and low in all years. ‏
According to
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 what is shown ,the
percentage
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 began to rise in 1960. The maximum increase was in 1980
,
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 when the
percentage
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 was 15%. ‏
Whereas
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 the
percentage
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 began to fall in 1980 and
soar
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soared
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 slightly in 1990.In the period between 19980 and 2000, the percentages
was
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fluctuated ,not constant ،the
percentage
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 did not exceed 10%. ‏
Then
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 starting in 2000 the
percentage
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 increased significantly, and in 2010 it became slightly higher than 10%.In the years 2010 to 2020, the
percentage
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 was on a moderate path. It did not change much and did not exceed 15%. ‏
To sum up
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, we could say that The
percentage
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 of teenagers who followed a
vegetable eating
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vegetable-eating
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 diet in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1960 to 2020 did not exceed 15%, and the percentages were variable.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • speculate
  • dietary recommendations
  • implications
  • health awareness
  • external factors
  • government policies
  • educational programs
  • advertising
  • consumption
  • stability
  • statistical data
  • notable changes
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