the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who consumed

coffee

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and tea in the

last

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4 weeks. Those individuals were from five cities in Australia.

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, in the majority of the cities, the highest amount of people bought fresh

coffee

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while

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the lowest percentage of individuals spent their money in a cafe .

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, regarding places with the biggest fresh

coffee

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consumption , Sidney and Horbat took the first place , with over 60% of the population buying

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kind of beans.

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, in Adelaide, less than 40% of citizens bought

this

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type of caffeine in the

last

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4 weeks.

Also

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this

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type of

coffee

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was the most wanted in all

municipalitys

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municipalities

except Adelaide.

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,the biggest consumption of instant

coffee

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was made in Brisban and Hobart, with the percentages over 50%.

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, in Sidney ,

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category represented only a bit over 42%.Yet , the least amount of citizens in all 5

metropolis

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went to a cafe for

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apply

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caffeine or

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apply

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tea, being the sortiment where individuals did not consume big amounts of money.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

176 words

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the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways rather than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a reply to Daisy. In your email, you have to tell her that you really like the photos and the time you got together, describe a problem you had at the airport to her and suggest the time and place for the next trip.

some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. discuss both views and give your own opinion.