The given bar chart illustrates how many households owned and rented places in England and Wales during the period of 93 years.

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The

given

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apply

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bar graph shows

the

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apply

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how many people owned and rented

the

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apply

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places in the UK and Wales from 1918 to 2011. The data

has

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given as

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percentage

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a percentage

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Overall

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, owned accommodation showed

the

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upward trend over the period

while

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rented accommodation showed

downward

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a downward

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trent

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trend

over the period. In the

begin

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beginning

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(1918), rented

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house

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houses

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had the highest

percentage

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accounted

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accounting for

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above 75% and

later

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in later

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years it went down continuously.

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, in 1971,

rented

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the rented

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house

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houses

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and owned

house

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pecentage

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percentage

was equal and it was

exact

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exactly

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half

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percentage

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the percentage

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After

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this

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point rented

house

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percentage

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was maintained below the owned

house

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Owened

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The owened

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house

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graph started at around 20% and steadily it went up over

this

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period. After 1981, it passes the rented

house

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% . In 1981, it was 60% and continuously it reached close to 70% in 2001 and

then

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atfer

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after

2001, it had

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a slight

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slight

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slightly

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decreased

acounted

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accounted

counted

around 65%. So,

owned

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the owned

show examples

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house

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houses

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highest point was around 70%

while

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rented

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the rented

show examples

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house

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houses

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highest

poit

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point

was above 75%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, house with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

161 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

illustrates
households
owned
rented
trend
shift
steadily
increased
declined
majority
gradual
percentage
homeowners
renters
prominent
attributed
affordability
availability
mortgage loans
initiatives
government
housing preferences
financial situations

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