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Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?

#people #internet #information #access
Nowadays, the diversity of
information
 provided by searching on the internet is considered
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valuable knowledge. In my opinion, being able to get access easily to all kinds of
information
 brings an enormous number of opportunities into
people
’s lives. The accessibility of any
information
 may evoke the occurrence of some serious consequences. Thanks to the internet, there is a chance to find answers to some questions that interest you regarding any topic in the world, be it
synthesis
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 of plants or fashion trends in France throughout the 1800s. Being capable of reading any documents and
scientists
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 studies related to subjects either biology or math,
help
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people
 who wish to develop and be well-rounded, to be cognizant
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, unless they are studying in university. There are
also
 a myriad of articles which have been vital
helpful
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 for individuals in daily life, providing some steps of first aid in case of emergency circumstances. The accessibility of knowledge simplifies lives and frees us from the necessity to master some courses at
colleges
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.
However
, sometimes
people
 could be misinformed by
information
 written by
pseudo experts
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in
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 doubtful websites, which can lead to severe consequences because of not
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 rendering
first
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 aid.
As a result
 of unverified
information
, the stereotypes appear and as much worse
people
 may end up in a hospital.
This
 pushes
people
 to sort out the
information
 they soak up every day from web sources.
To sum up
, I agree that the appearance of a source where a person can reveal for himself some gripping facts counts as valuable. Despite any issues based on it, it’s only for the benefit of humanity.
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