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Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #internet #information #access
Nowadays,
the
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 diversity of
information
 is provided by the internet with a double click. Being able to access easily
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some kinds of
information
 brings an enormous number of opportunities into people’s lives,
while
 the accessibility of any
information
 may evoke the occurrence of some serious consequences
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 Thanks to the internet, there is a chance to find answers to many questions the reader is interested in regarding a variety of topics, be it
synthesis
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 of plants or fashion trends in France throughout the 1800s. Being capable of reading educational documents and scientific studies helps
be
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 well-rounded by being cognizant of the nature of events and exact data. There are
also
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an
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assisting
tool
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tools
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 in daily life, providing,
for example
, first aid tips in case of emergency situations. The accessibility of knowledge simplifies lives and frees
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 the necessity to master some courses at
colleges
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.
However
, sometimes people could be misinformed by texts written by
pseudo experts
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suspicious
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and suspicious
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 websites, which can lead to severe consequences like being hospitalised.
This
 pushes people to sort out the
information
 they soak up on a regular basis/regularly from web sources.
To sum up
, I agree that the appearance of a source where a person can reveal for himself some gripping facts counts as valuable. Despite unverified
information
/
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 risk of acquiring suspicious data, it may be more beneficial for humanity.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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