Smoking should be banned in public places because it not only harms the smokers, but also those who are nearby. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is a main cause
for
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serious illnesses and
whole
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the whole
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society
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of society
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affect
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some negative effects due
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this
bad
behaviour
. Mainly
this
phenomenon does not only
effect
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affect
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for
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users but
also
effect
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affects
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person
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people
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who
are connect
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with
among
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apply
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those
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addictors and
seen
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have seen
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this
addicted
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behaviour
. In
this
essay
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I will discuss both
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points
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of view considering
social
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the social
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drawback
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drawbacks
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from
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these
situation
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and personal rights for
democratic
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society. On the first point,
People
face some bad scenarios without directly involvement
for
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in
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the event. Smoking is the best answer
for
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to
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this
. Because of, if
some one
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someone
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who closely
engage
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engages
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with some
smokers
and
stay
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stays
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near a smoker, they will categorize as
a
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indirect
smokers
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smoker
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. The baddest result from
this
, the smoker
smoke
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smokes
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through the filter and
some
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a
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few things like tar and gases
does
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not enter to respiration system
due to
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available in the cigarettes. But the indirect
smokers
breath
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breathe
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these things through the air.
Therefor
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, If
people
use public
place
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places
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to smoke, it is
worst
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the worst
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experience for others nearby
to
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apply
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them
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apply
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. In
Addison
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addition
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to that, Some children show these
smokers
in
this
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apply
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public places and they try to feel
this
experience. After
that
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it will be
a
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the
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first step
of
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addiction
of
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these kind
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this kind
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of unnecessary
behaviour
On the other hand
,
People
have an
independent
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to do something on their own mind. In
this
scenario, unable to force
the
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apply
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people
to avoid
these kind
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this kind
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of
behaviour
. Because
of
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there are some rights to
people
to live everywhere in their own
behaviour
. Some
persons
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people
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gain some comfortable
situation
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situations
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if they have to smoke. In conclusion,
Although
some agree points of
these
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this addicted behaviour
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addicted
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addictive
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behaviour
, I totally agree with
this
argument. Because of smoking is world
wide
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worldwide
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problem that the unable to avoid from the
people
due to
some business strategies. As a government should
get
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make
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decision
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the decision
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to control
this
health issue
some how
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somehow
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or other, it will
great
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greatly
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support
to generate
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generating
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healthy
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a healthy
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generation.
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