Many people spend a lot of money on clothes, haircuts, and beauty products to enhance their appearance. Some people think that it is a good way to spend money, while others think that there is a better way to spend it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Mostly,people
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that putting money on clothes,haircuts and beauty products could enhance their look
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so they think it is a better way to spend.
whereas
, others believe there are more useful things than grooming.
Firstly
, everyone believes that grooming themselves more attractive can bring them huge opportunities.Because of that, everyone buys new clothes,
cosmetics
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and
also
goes to a hairstylist.
Moreover
, some companies highly concentrate on their
employees
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appearance.
For example
, a cosmetic company or a fashion company wants their workers to be as fashionable as their products and
also
beautiful ,since they
also
reprensent
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represent
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companies
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product.
consequenty
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, people were in
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need to make them more voguish.
On the other hand
, it is
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preferable to improve their skills based on the
job
expectation,rather than wasting their money on outlooks.
In particular
, we can learn to program,design and so on .Since
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most
of
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the
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companies
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a
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skilled labour and
therefore
acquiring those skills can give us a
job
.
For instance
, a person who learns to program can get a
job
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tcs
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TCS
,
vipbro
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Vibro
and other service or
product based
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programming industries.
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a designer can get a
job
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designing
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field.Owing to that , we need to invest
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our learning.
To conclude
,grooming ourselves was a more
essenential
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essential
quality.But in my opinion ,
along with
outlooks ,we
also
nees
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need
to improve our knowledge.Because
,
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beauty without knowledge is a sin.
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