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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates information about 5 indicators (
population
,
population
 increase since 2017,
density
, land area, and urban
population
.) among 3 countries, which are the highest populations in the world.
Overall
,
China
 is the most
at
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in
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 its
population
 and land area whilst Indian's
population
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has increase
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increase
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increased
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 since 2017 and
density
 is the highest of
three
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the three
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 countries. With regard to
population
,
China
 is the most at 1.415 billion which is closely followed by
India
 at 1.354 billion,
whereas
India
's land area is the lowest and even lower than
one third
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 of
China
's one which is the highest at 9.388 million square
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
Therefore
,
density
, which means people per square
kilometers
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kilometres
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, in
India
 is the largest at 455
that
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which
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 is over three times
of
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apply
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China
's
density
 at 151. Regarding
population
 increase since 2017,
India
 shows the highest number at +1.11% which is over
other
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the other
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 two
countries
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countries'
country's
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 indicators.
Urban
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The urban
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population
 is the
most
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highest
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 in the United States at 83%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, density, china, india with synonyms.
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  • population growth
  • age distribution
  • urbanization
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • healthcare accessibility
  • literacy rate
  • educational attainment
  • demographic trends
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic factors
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