Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is claimed by
some
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that school
teachers
are more influential in the development of the thinking system and social
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of
children
than their parents.
While
the effectiveness of tutors is undeniable, I cannot agree that
this
can surpass the parent's and family's influence. Being confronted with schools and
teachers
is one of the greatest steps and most effective events in the
life
of every child.
Teachers
are responsible for not only teaching school materials but
also
nurturing
children
and teaching them how to behave as a member of society.
Children
, being faced with someone who knows better and
also
has the dominant control, begin to take their
teachers
as role models.
Therefore
, they might be more tended to follow the tutors' values and
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patterns.
Moreover
, tutors may broaden the viewpoint of
children
by introducing them to concepts and theories which they have never faced in their closed family environments. namely, as has been observed in recent decades, schools were the places where most intellectual and value systems have shaped and lasted for
life
.
However
, the family is the place
one's
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personality has
shaped
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first and
also
where they experience most of the real-
life
events. So I believe, it would be the most effective factor in the personal and social development of everyone. It is in the family, where
children
face with most tangible and actual
life
problems and different methods for approaching them.
For instance
, they might feel the economic crisis effects on the family and watch how their parents have dealt with it, and
this
personal experience may or may not be in
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of the free market theory they have learnt about at school.
Furthermore
, based on psychological theories, the belief and
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personality of each individual is shaped during their first five years of
life
,
teachers
may never surpass
this
most initiative effect.
To conclude
, I believe that despite the significant influence of
teachers
in the development of
children
's social and intellectual systems, parents' effectiveness is
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essential.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Structured learning environment
  • Cognitive skills
  • Social interactions
  • Pedagogical techniques
  • Moral values
  • Emotional well-being
  • Complementary roles
  • Academic and social education
  • Individualized attention
  • Life skills training
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