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Nowadays, people spend too much time at work to the extent that they hardly have any time for their personal life. How widespread is the problem and what are the consequences.

#people #time #work #life #consequences
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, ones may dedicate a lot of
time
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 work,
consequently
, they may have less
time
 for their own personal
life
.
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 is
widespread
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 phenomenon which may have devastating
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repercussions
 in our relationships. As a parent who is responsible for children's economic
life
, there would be a lot of stress in order to ensure a respectful
life
 for every member
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 the family. That would demand you to work for not little
time
.
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 the one hand, trying to improve the quality of
life
 as much as possible and
on the other hand
, the
time
is
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left for your own family doesn't enough. The
time
 we spend with near relations is a gold
time
.
That is
 the
time
 we can escape from stressful issues we have to deal with in our daily
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.
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this
time
 is critical for our psychological health. One must have
time
 to clean his/her mind and feel there is a goal to achieve by working hard. In conclusion, we must try to find
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 balance between these goals.
First,
workin
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working
- in order to feel
will
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 with your
aceivments
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achievements
 and contributing
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 society and your own economic strength and second to have the "escape
time
" for all your close circle wellbeing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workaholic
  • work-life balance
  • stress
  • burnout
  • strain
  • personal relationships
  • family life
  • physical health
  • sleep deprivation
  • lack of exercise
  • productivity
  • creativity
  • self-care
  • personal fulfillment
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