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You are the charge nurse on the hospital ward where Mr.Alfred Billy has recently had his operation.

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I am writing to refer
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Billy , who
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 care and management .
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 is recovering from Nodular Basal-Cell Carcinoma. and he is being discharged today.
Mr
. Billy was admitted to our hospital on 21/03/2010. Regrettably, he was diagnosed with skin cancer and he has been commenced on a tablet.Panadin Forte 500mg for pain reliever .
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 taken skin biopsy for pathological study. Regarding his social history ,
Mr
. Billy lives with her wife,
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 he
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in
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truck
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 driver.
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liquor
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 and cigarette smoker for the past 30 years. Kindly,
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 that he
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 daily observation .
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he
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 continue medicine for one more week. At the time, of
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Mr.
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 Billy is perfectly well. and no complaints of any pain. It would be greatly appreciated
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if you could take over the care of
Mr
.Billy and do a relevant assessment of his problem. If
yo
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 have any queries , please do not hesitate to contact me.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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