Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Today the whole spectrum of individuals just want to relish themselves rather than pay attention to the

religion

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and

tradition

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traditional

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aspects which is associated with

festivals

. I take issue with

this

view,

while

, excessive growth in technology has led to these parts of

festivals

become forget

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to some extent, there are those who make an effort to conserve these parts of ceremonies as a cultural heritage. In the

last

decades,

people

have acknowledged the paramount importance of enjoyment in their lives, which has a profound impact on their longevity and productivity. By doing so, they take advantage of both religious and traditional ceremonies as a source of fun to

make

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themselves

amused

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. Wearing

latest

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customs, preparing meals, and decorating their house which are inspired by cutting-edge technology are the best examples of these activities which are related to

relish

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relishing

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the atmosphere without considering the

value

of

tradition

.

In addition

, excessive advancement in technology

such

as social media underlines the

needs

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need

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of representing

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to represent

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their fun

life style

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lifestyle

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. The more they feel happy during

festivals

, the more followers they can attract.

Resulting in

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, individuals particularly

new

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generation have become affected by

this

phenomenon which leads to

forget

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integral

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part of

festivals

.

In contrast

negative mentioned above, there are some reasons that illustrate

tradition

and cultural part of

festivals

are conserved by individuals.

Firstly

, there are numerous campaigns, holding ceremonies in society,

where

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that

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encourage

people

to make a contribution to

this

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these

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events.

This

action not only enhances their cultural consciousness but

also

promote

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conventional

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value

of each ceremony.

This

in the long term,

help

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people

to appreciate the

value

of their history.

Furthermore

, educational

establishment

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establishments

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such

as schools try to impart knowledge by taking place

festivals

in order to reinforce the

value

of

tradition

. By doing so, school children acquire a great deal of information

that is

more likely to conserve these aspects of

festivals

as a cultural heritage.

Finally

, these activities

doing

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done

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by these organizations enhance

peoples

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people's

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interest regard to accepting old

religion

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religions

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and

tradition

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traditions

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.

To sum

up

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there are those who opine

tradition

and religious part of

festivals

have become obsolete and

people

just want to derive benefit from these events to entertain themselves,

,

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apply

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nevertheless

, I believe that these values are being preserved by

activity

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the activity

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of educational

centers

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centres

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and

campaign

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campaigns

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.