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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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A great number of high school graduates decide to take a
one
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year
 break to travel or find jobs to gain more work experience before enrolling in higher
education
. Even Though many people hold the view that it is
time
-consuming to take a
year
 off, I believe if the
time
 is used reasonably, taking
time
 off to see the world is a great idea. On the one hand, there are several advantages to taking a gap
year
. Most importantly, having a
year
 off to travel helps young adults
to
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explore more different cultures from numerous regions.
As a result
, they can mature independently and have
skills
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 to cope with life’s problems.
Moreover
, having a job during a gap
year
 may broaden
student’s
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students’
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 horizons and learn essential skills
such
 as
decision making
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,
time
 management,
problem solving
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 and communicating,
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In addition
 to
this
, if you have enough
experiences
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experience
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 from going out to see the world, you can realize your passion and decide what field you want to study to facilitate your future career preparation.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of pausing for a
year
 should be taken into consideration. The most significant drawback is that it can be a distraction from
further
 studies. If young adults
finds
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 out it is easy to earn money, they will value the job
instead
 of the knowledge they can get from third-level
education
 and their studying habits will be negatively affected.
Furthermore
, it is
time
-consuming if
highschool
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high school
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 graduates devote more
time
 to relaxing and enjoying themselves all the
time
 during the
year
 off.
Hence
, students who choose to have one
year
 off often suffer from boredom and get lost in their path of ambition. They will
also
 feel depressed and aimless when seeing their peers succeed in their
career
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careers
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.
To conclude
, taking a gap
year
 before entering tertiary
education
 could disrupt a student's ability to pursue their
education
.
However
, if the
time
 is used wisely, skipping a
year
 of studying can allow them to gain more knowledge and learn important skills.
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