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The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.

The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.
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The illustration below demonstrates the sales of Spinach, Broccoli, Garlic, Peas and Ginger in the City of Qatari for the years 1980 to 2020.
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, it can be seen that Spinach had the highest figures in 1980 but declined its value towards 2020. Meanwhile, Garlic products have steadily increased their imports for the said years. In 1980, Spinach reached as high as 500
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 of its products making it the largest item imported in Qatari.
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, its value decreased from 1990 to 2020 and got below 400 oodles only.
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, Broccoli reached its peak in 2020 earning 200 plus
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 from less than 200 oodles.
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, Garlic items which from 200
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 of production to 400
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 in 2020 making it the highest sales among the four.
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, Ginger has fluctuating values from 1980 to 2020 and only has 200-300
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 in the market. It earns as high as 300
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 in the year 2000.
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, Peas maintained its figures of less than 200
tons
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 in the year 1980 to 2020.
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