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Band 6

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have been a satisfied and permanent customer of your
magazine
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 for several years, but now I am disappointed because recently I read a topic of your
magazine
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 which includes false
information
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 about my
town
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. In fact,
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information
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 is completely unacceptable, for the following reasons. my
town
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 is one of the ancient cities of the world and it has traditional buildings,
such
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 as Persepolis, Vakil Bazaar, and many traditional gardens, but Khajo Bridge is not in my
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 and is located in Isfahan.
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, the official language and lingua franca in my
town
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 is Persian but in your
magazine
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, the language of my city is written incorrectly.
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 should be important for your
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 to give the correct
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 because false
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 may confuse tourists. As your regular customer and to maintain the credibility of the
magazine
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, I suggest considering the mistake that has occurred and correcting
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 false
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 in the next version.
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, it is better to read details of maps from the internet before publishing
information
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 about the cities. Kind regards, Saeid Shirazi

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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