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Some people think that development in technology causes environmental problems. Other people believe that technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both sides of the argument and then give your opinion

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One of the main causes of / reasons for
of
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environmental
damage
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 is advancements in areas of
science
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 and technology.
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 some people,
science
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 will eventually solve all the
problems
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 it created and
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 reverse the environmental
damage
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; I agree with
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 view but it may take many more years; for the time being, adopting a simpler
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 is more effective at reducing environmental
problems
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. By reducing our consumption of resources, we can reduce environmental
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 to a great extent.
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 of us can contribute our bit by using resources wisely.
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, we should make a conscious effort to avoid the wastage of energy.
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, we should not waste food. We should adopt the reduce, reuse and recycle approach in all aspects of
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. By simply reducing our consumption, we can not only save resources for future generations
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 but
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 reduce our carbon footprint. Planting more trees and switching to renewable sources of energy are other measures that each individual can take to reduce the environmental
damage
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 caused by them.
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,
science
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 will eventually solve the
problems
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 it created.
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, plastic is now a major cause of environmental
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. One day, scientists will find a way to produce plastic that decomposes easily.
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, fossil fuels cause considerable ecological
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 now, but we are already working on green sources of energy. Of course, it might take centuries for
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 to solve these
problems
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 and by that time we would have
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 damaged the planet.
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, there is no harm in adopting a simpler
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 to reduce
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damage
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. In conclusion,
science
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 will certainly find a way to reverse the
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 it
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.
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,
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 may take many more centuries and by that time we will have caused even more
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 to the environment.
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, I believe that adopting a simple
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 is essential until
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 can miraculously solve all environmental issues.
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task response
Be sure to fully address all parts of the task. The essay should discuss both points of view thoroughly and then give a balanced opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction should clearly outline what you will discuss in your essay. Avoid using vague statements and ensure a clear thesis statement.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion should effectively summarize your main points and restate your position clearly without introducing new ideas.
task response
Develop each paragraph with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting sentences and examples. Ensure that the examples are directly related to the topic and support your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use cohesive devices properly to make the progression of ideas clear and logical. Pay attention to paragraphing, which should help the reader identify main ideas easily.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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