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some people think that studying history is a waste of time whereas others think it is essential to learn history . discuss both views and give youropinion

#people #history #waste #time #youropinion
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A section of the public believes that learning
history
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 is
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time consuming
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.
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, others argue that it is imperative to have some knowledge about the past times. Both
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arguments need proper scrutiny before forming any opinion. I like to explicate in the paragraphs to come. The advocates of
first
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 view deem that studying
history
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 is not relevant to any certain career paths.
History
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doesnot
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does not
doesn't
boost
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 our points and put
extra
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the extra
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 expression
in
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 getting jobs so it is
time consuming
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 subject includes unnecessary dates which
is
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 very difficult to memorize.
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, No one
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 questions about the wars
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that happened
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 in the past because it has no impact on
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business development. On
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,
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 group claims that
history
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 is necessary to learn because it connects us with our roots. By learning
history
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, a person comes to know about the culture and traditions of the past and how it has shaped the present.
History
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 remains
only
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 subject which is helpful in connecting today's generation to the past.
Holistory
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History
 provides insight into human behaviour and helps us to avoid repeating mistakes. In conclusion,
although
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history
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 dates are impossible to remember
but
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I am of the opinion that
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a person
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 should learn
history
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 because it teaches us many useful lessons which will prove beneficial in the future.
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