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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities
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The given table compares the underground railway systems in six major cities measured in the annual number of
passengers
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. The data supported with the
route
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 established in and the length of each.
Overall
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, the three oldest and longest
route
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 serves more passenger compared to the newest one.
Although
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,
London
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 and Paris were constructed earlier and longer, Tokyo served more
people
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.
To begin
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 with, the oldest and the greatest
route
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 was
London
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. It was built in 1863 with 394 Kilometers apart and served 775 million annual
passengers
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.
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, Paris provided more
people
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 than
London
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 about 500
people
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 a year with only a half
route
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 and raised 37 years earlier. Interestingly, Tokyo gave more
passengers
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 about 3 times from
London
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 and 2 times from Paris
while
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 only a halfway
route
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 from
London
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 at 155 Km. Regarding the three newest trains, Washington DC provided 20 times smaller annual
passengers
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 than Tokyo with only 144 customers. In terms of Kyoto
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Los Angeles served the smallest number of
passengers
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 per year with only 45 and 50
people
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, route, london, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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