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The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide information about senior high school students in Australia's activities after graduation over a twenty-
year
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 period.
Overall
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, there are three different types of people in Australia who prefer to continue their education or be employed,
while
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 fewer of them are unemployed.
To begin
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, the data of students who got their job increased by 5% every period, which means most of them chose to be workers despite taking undergraduate the peak of quantity until 55% in the
year
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 2000.
Otherwise
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, the percentage of unemployed was 10% in 1980.
This
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 number grew by 2% in a ten-
year
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 time but suddenly declined in 2000
year
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 to 8%.
Furthermore
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, the young generation in Australia took their bachelor's degree 50% in 1980 but fell by 12% in the next ten-
year
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 period, which means in 1990 the number dipped to 38%. To the
last
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year
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 in 2000 just a slight 1% difference between 1990 and 2000
year
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 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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