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Some people prefer to go to gym and clubs for health care other say that walking and jumping stairs are more affective. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #gym #clubs #health #care #stairs #affective
It has become common for people to go to
gym
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for maintaining
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a
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good health,
while
 on the other side, some believe regular
day to
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day-to-day
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day
activity
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activities
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 like jumping
staires
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stairs
 and walking
are
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is
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suffcient
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sufficient
. In
this
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i
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 will discuss
about
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both
the
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views and present my opinion. To start with
excercising
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exercising
 is very
imprtant
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important
 for a healthy human body to function in
a
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 ideal manner.
Gym
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 is the common option for people who have busy
life style
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lifestyle
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 and desk jobs as
their
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they
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involves
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involve
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 sitting on a chair all
day
 and
stairing
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staring
 at a computer screen for
majority
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the majority
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 of the
day
. Woking out helps them develop
muscels
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muscles
 and helps
increasing
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 physical strength, at the same time reducing fat. Most doctors now
advice
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paitents
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patients
 with health conditions like cholesterol and
diebeties
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diabetes
 to
workout
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work out
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 for
atleast
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at least
 30 minutes each
day
 to maintain their health.
On the other hand
, activities like running and jumping
does
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 have substantial benefits. Sports professionals always start their
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training
trading
traing
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training
 with walking and running as it helps them build
a
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momentum for training which
also
 increases stamina and
enable
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 them
perform
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 well
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