The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table provides information about the underground railway systems (date opened, kilometres of
route
, and Use synonyms
passenger
per year) in six different cities (London, Paris, Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
Tokyo
, Washington DC, Use synonyms
Kyoto
, and Use synonyms
Los
Use synonyms
Angeles
). Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
Tokyo
and Paris had more than 1,000 numbers of Use synonyms
travelers
, Change the spelling
travellers
while
London, Washington DC, Linking Words
Los
Use synonyms
Angeles
, and Use synonyms
Kyoto
had fewer than 1,000 Use synonyms
passengers
. Interestingly, Use synonyms
Los
Use synonyms
Angeles
was the only city that opened in the 2000-year.
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To begin
with, Linking Words
Tokyo
had the highest passenger number in 1927 Use synonyms
passengers
which began to operate in 1900 and had 155 Use synonyms
kilometers
of Use synonyms
route
. Paris, which opened 27 years earlier than Use synonyms
Tokyo
(1990) had 1191 Use synonyms
passengers
in 199 Kilometer of Use synonyms
route
.
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Next,
London, which opened in 1863 was 394 Linking Words
kilometers
long, Use synonyms
had
775 customers. Correct word choice
and had
Then
100 years later, Washington DC started to operate in 1976 at 144 Linking Words
passengers
in 126 Use synonyms
kilometers
of Use synonyms
route
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, in the latest year, Linking Words
Kyoto
and Use synonyms
Los
Use synonyms
Angeles
had the lowest number of Use synonyms
passengers
per year at 45 and 50 respectively. Use synonyms
Additionally
, the oldest cities are the higher Linking Words
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kilometers
of Change the spelling
kilometres
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route
they had, excluding Add an article
the route
Kyoto
.Use synonyms
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