Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
A
lot
of young people choose to spend their time
one year after graduate
from high school to work or Change the verb form
graduating
studying
before enrolling in university. The experience that they will get by doing these will be beneficial before returning to education. I totally agree with Wrong verb form
study
this
as working and experiencing different cultures can help youngsters to find their passion
and to understand themselves deeper which would help them in dealing with collage
life.
Correct your spelling
college
Passion
is a crucial thing as it guides student
in choosing their major. A Add an article
the student
lot
of youths are struggling in choosing
their field of study because they have not discovered their true passions. Change preposition
to choose
This
could happen because the time
they have in school is not enough to experience a lot
of things. Taking a one-year break to do paid jobs or travelling
will help students to find their Replace the word
travel
passion
because passion
can be found by experiencing many things and meeting new peoples
. Fix the agreement mistake
people
For instance
, if someone experience
working Change the verb form
experiences
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
in different companies with different responsibility, he/she can figure out which job he/she want
to do in the future and what should be studied in university to get that job.
Change the verb form
wants
On the other hand
, working and travelling will help student
to have better self-understand. It is because people learn a Fix the agreement mistake
students
lot
about our self
when Correct pronoun usage
themselves
we
face new Correct pronoun usage
they
challenge
and try to figure out new things. Fix the agreement mistake
challenges
For example
, when planning for travelling
to a different country, some people tend to arrange everything as early as possible and some Change preposition
to travel
doing
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do
overnight
plan. Add an article
the overnight
an overnight
This
type of self-understanding will help student
when dealing with a Fix the agreement mistake
students
lot
of challenge
that they will have in university.
In conclusion, taking a one-year gap is not a waste of Change the form of the verb
challenges
time
if it is used for doing paid work or travelling as it could lead to finding passion
and self-understanding.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. Avoid repetitive phrasing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite