The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below depicts the process of generating electricity in a hydroelectric energy station by using
water
resources.
Overall
,
according to
the
data
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the process of generating electricity
power
starts by conducting
water
flow towards turbines.
Then
the turbines under
water
pressure start to turn and run the generator.
Finally
, the produced energy in
power
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the power
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station is transferred to the national grid.
Firstly
, as
waster
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water
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is the most crucial element in generating hydroelectric energy, river
water
flows toward a
reservoir
at a dam which has been placed at a high elevation. During the day the intake is opened, and fluid
descended
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toward the
low level
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low-level
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reservoir
with the help of reversible turbines, which,
operates
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the generator.
However
, During the night the mechanism operates in the opposite direction.
In other
words
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the fluid from
low
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a low
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elevated
reservoir
is pumped toward the upper
reservoir
.
This
circular process operates during days and nights.
Finally
, the generated
power
is transferred to
national
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the national
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grid by
power
lines.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, power, reservoir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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