The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below depicts the process of generating electricity in a hydroelectric energy station by using
water
resources.
Overall
, according to
the data
the process of generating electricity Add a comma
data,
power
starts by conducting water
flow towards turbines. Then
the turbines under water
pressure start to turn and run the generator. Finally
, the produced energy in power
station is transferred to the national grid.
Correct article usage
the power
Firstly
, as waster
is the most crucial element in generating hydroelectric energy, river Correct your spelling
water
water
flows toward a reservoir
at a dam which has been placed at a high elevation. During the day the intake is opened, and fluid descended
toward the Wrong verb form
descends
low level
Add a hyphen
low-level
reservoir
with the help of reversible turbines, which, operates
the generator. Correct subject-verb agreement
operate
However
, During the night the mechanism operates in the opposite direction. In other
words
the fluid from Add a comma
words,
low
elevated Correct article usage
a low
reservoir
is pumped toward the upper reservoir
. This
circular process operates during days and nights. Finally
, the generated power
is transferred to national
grid by Add an article
the national
power
lines.Submitted by golriiz23 on
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