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The cost of electricity for the average household is increasing in many countries. What are the causes of this phenomenon? What are the possible solutions?

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. so, it can be solved by applying solar
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household
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acclerating
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accelerating
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 in normal
houseold
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household
 family.
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the
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recently
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electricity
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machine
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that is
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 consuming
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pwer
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power
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 to surging
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every month. On the other legitimate side,
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 reduced if solar
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panel
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apply
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 on the roof
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houseolder
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house
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 process despite
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 for average people.
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 product in their houses.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Task Response: The essay lacks a clear structure and presents ideas in a disorganized manner. It also fails to address all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence & Cohesion: The essay lacks a coherent structure, with the introduction and conclusion being unclear. The ideas are presented in a jumbled manner, and there is a lack of logical progression throughout the essay.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • causes
  • solutions
  • electricity
  • average household
  • increasing
  • countries
  • global demand
  • rising fuel costs
  • production costs
  • renewable energy sources
  • aging infrastructure
  • maintenance costs
  • government regulations
  • taxes
  • inefficient use
  • population growth
  • access to affordable electricity
  • competition
  • energy market
  • technological advancements
  • smart grid systems
  • consumer behavior
  • energy conservation
  • education
  • awareness
  • energy saving
  • energy subsidies
  • government support
  • energy efficiency
  • energy conservation
  • renewable energy
  • deregulation
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