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some people think that studying history is a waste of time, whereas others. think it is important to learn history. discuss both views and give your opinion

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A section of the public believes that studying
history
 is time-consuming.
However
, others argue that it is imperative to know about the past times. Both arguments need proper scrutiny before forming any opinion and I like to explicate in the paragraphs to come. The advocates of the first view deem that studying
history
 is time-consuming as it is useless in providing career opportunities.
History
 involves a lot of dates which are difficult to memorize and it does not teach any skills or techniques which are helpful in business growth.
As a result
, learning
history
 is
such
 a waste of time. The University of Britain,
for example
, focuses on practical subjects like science and economics which help students to understand business skills more clearly than students who are learning
history
.
On the other hand
, folks who are in favour of learning
history
, have their own valid points. The major point is maintaining a connection between the cultural roots and modern civilization. It is undoubtful that generation keeps them updated with the latest fashion but
history
 keeps them connected with their culture and traditions. It provides awareness among the young today's generation about the problems which early people faced during
old
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 age period. They can learn from their mistakes and make sure will not repeat them again to lead a comfortable life. Considering that
history
 provides information about the lifestyle of the medieval period
and
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people can only gain
this
 knowledge if they study
history
. In the end, it is true that studying
history
 has many advantages
whereas
, I am of the opinion that to lead a luxurious life, an individual must know the business tricks which are not obtained by focusing on
history
.
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