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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Advertisement is something we see every single day, whenever we turn on the television, the radio or even when we are swiping on social media. Some feel it dominates our decision in purchasing
while
 others think it’s merely another thing to be instantly forgotten. Below I am going to discuss valid opinions on both sides. The frequency of the advertisement can cause either benefits or disadvantages for a
product
. To be fully upfront, it is reasonable for
people
 to be prone to ignore the ads
due to
 familiarity and disinterest in the
content
 since advertising is never the main purpose of the
audience
. It is the extra
content
 made by companies to promote their
product
 or services.
However
, with frequent appearances, ads can still leave an
impression
 on the
audience
,
while
 The more frequently an ad appears it may cause opposite effects
such
 as a dropping
product
 image as it annoys the
audience
 too often.
However
, is a noxious
impression
 still an
impression
? holds its position. The reason why the
audience
 tends to snob the ads is because they have already been familiar with the
content
.
Therefore
, without a doubt, the
product
 has successfully left an
impression
 on
people
, which can be regarded as half of success. When you leave an
impression
, the
product
 will immediately come to mind when
people
 run into the same kind of needs,
then
 consider considering whether to purchase it or not is the next step.
As a result
, I suppose advertising is undoubtedly influential in determining
people
 to buy things. Creating an
impression
 is a simple but critical task.
Last
 but not least, if the advertisement can be delicately designed, either extraordinary or touching, it will definitely leave a positive glowing image for the
product
 and the company. In conclusion, I am convinced that
people
 to some extent affected by the
content
 they frequently engage in are exposed to.
Therefore
, we should always It is
also
 the reason why we should be aware of the resources of the information and its resources we acquire access daily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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